So good I hardly know where to start! I like the limitations on Subaru's powers; they're all very logical, particularly "no time travel". It's so sensible that Subaru has the power to tweak things as they go along in order to make MiA's wish fully realized. That's much more believable than simply snapping fingers and having everything already done.
The explanation of what happens to Subaru between masters is really fascinating...something I never bothered thinking about before. And the story of how he was bound to the bottle is quite sad, since he was trying to do the right thing. Poor Baru!
One teeny typo I notice: At the beginning of the scene where MiA is getting dressed for his modeling appointment, you have Yo-ka talking to Subaru instead. Off to read Part 2...
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Date: 2015-11-22 02:58 pm (UTC)The explanation of what happens to Subaru between masters is really fascinating...something I never bothered thinking about before. And the story of how he was bound to the bottle is quite sad, since he was trying to do the right thing. Poor Baru!
One teeny typo I notice: At the beginning of the scene where MiA is getting dressed for his modeling appointment, you have Yo-ka talking to Subaru instead. Off to read Part 2...